• floofloof@lemmy.ca
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    8 months ago

    “Under Trump’s watch, Columbus Regional Health is cutting medical services.”

    Verbose and indirect sounding, and long enough that it needs a comma in the middle. Could they not have made that a little more punchy?

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      8 months ago

      Length doesn’t create commas. That’s an adverbial phrase. There are plenty of single word adverbial phrases. I could come up with three word sentences with commas.

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        8 months ago

        Yeah, but if you’re composing a slogan for a billboard people might glimpse for a few moments, you want it short and direct. “Trump is cutting your medical services” or something. The adverbial phrase is itself unnecessary verbosity.

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      8 months ago

      I think that’s fairly to the point. If you get too punchy with it, you give the GOP a reason to distract/make an accusation of “politicizing” a very serious issue for your own gain.

      The yellow billboard makes a point to grab attention to warn people. Especially people who may be driving and on their way to a local hospital that will be empty on their arrival. It looks like the warnings on most shit that’s harmful for your health.