• SethranKada@lemmy.ca
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    It’s pretty good, easier to read than most native speakers I’d say.

    If I had to give a critique, I’d say the letters are rather round, so it can be hard to tell an ‘a’ from an ‘o’, but most people develop quirks like that in English so it’s perfectly fine.

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    是很漂亮!It looks like a font. Extremely neat. Though, the “tails” on some of your letters are so short that they might be mistaken for other letters.

    Like your P could be mistaken for a D

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    Looks good, just need to work on a few minor things:

    All of the ascenders and descenders (lines that extend above and below) need to be longer, especially on the f, d and the p. Also make sure the line on the right side of the a is clear and noticeable, it looks a lot like an o because you can hardly see that line. Overall the round parts of letters like a, d, g, p, etc are a little too wide/fat, so that combined with the vertical line parts being too short makes them look too similar to an o.

    That may sound like a lot of criticism, but overall it does look very good. It just takes a lot of words to try and describe these small issues.

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    Super neat, extremely readable. On a few you can tell you’ve taken a long time forming the letters, so probably just need to practice until you can write at a useful speed, while keeping it as neat.

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      Yeah most native writers are not going to write this nicely. We write faster and more sloppily.

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        People write to put information and thoughts on paper, not to do art. If you are doing art, then you’d go nice and slow I suppose

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    you have very legible and clean handwriting, but your proportions reduce legibility. all the letters do not have to be uniformly the same height, many need to be taller or shorter than others. if you look at the early writing books for children learning english you’ll see that instead of there beibg one “tier” for the letters to sit on, there are actually two. Capital letters are twice as tall as most lowercase letters and the majority of a lowercase letter is still in the lower tier, but ascenders and descenders should be full height which helps make it a lot more distinct.

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    Much better than my own handwriting. The only real feedback I have is to continue the curve on the top of the lowercase f a little longer

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    I taught 3rd grade in the US, where kids are expected to have their printing correct and start to learn cursive. I’d say your writing is very neat and readable. It has some differences that most US adults develop when they’ve gotten used to cursive and then need to use printing. So nobody is going to have any trouble with reading this.

    For instance, when little kids print, or US teachers teach it, the straight line on their e is horizontal. The stems on their a and m are straight and well-defined. Their v has a sharp point. Their f is tall, with a strong top hook and nothing below the sitting line. Their y and x made from two straight diagonal lines. And there’s no slant. But after writing in cursive for awhile, many adults form their printing similarly to you.

    The only thing I’d suggest you change is to make the top part of the f stronger and more hooked. That’s the one letter that might cause confusion, even though your t has a tail to differentiate it. Your assignment doesn’t include a q, but I suggest you be sure to curve or point its tail below the line in the opposite direction from the tail on your g.

    All in all, well done.

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    I thought your ‘f’s were ‘t’s until i saw your ‘t’s. The tops of ‘d’ and ‘b’ could be longer to look less like ‘o’. Otherwise, very sharp!

  • Captain Aggravated@sh.itjust.works
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    Very neat, though it looks like you’re afraid of ascenders and decenders. your f’s look cut off at the top, your h’s looks a little like n’s, etc. Looks like you’re trying to stick to a rule from a different alphabet that everything is the same height; the Latin alphabet doesn’t work like that, or at least, it doesn’t in lowercase.

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    I’d say the p’s and a’s need a bit more definition, but it’s better than mine for sure. The x looks a little off, but definitely legible. Pretty good, 8.5/10.

  • mrmacduggan@lemmy.ml
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    There is very little to criticize here. You’ve done a good job!

    However, it looks like this might have been done very slowly and carefully, so I think you will benefit from practicing writing faster now. You have the shapes, now get the speed!